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Sentence Clarity

Sometimes when I'm writing, I will jot down things I think of exactly how I would say them. This usually leads for things to be confusing, because I was taught you should not write how you speak. I think sentence clarity is the biggest problem for me when writing essays if I don't take the time to go back and change things around. I tend to use unclear pronouns such as this:

Unclear (unclear pronoun reference):

Larissa worked in a national forest last summer, which may be her career choice.

Clearer:

Larissa worked in a national forest last summer; forest management may be her career choice.

Extra Credit

On Friday evening I went over to the Tabernacle for quite a delightful surprise. While I was expecting a rather boring lecture there was a wonderful musical number by Dr. Nancy Allred and Dr. Paul Abegg. Nancy was on the piano and Paul the violin. They played one Beethoven song and one Mozart piece. Then a slide show came on beautiful pictures of London and particularly Cambridge University. Professor Moseley of Cambridge came to speak about closing the gap in humanities. He caught all of the audiences attention with his British phrases such as "jolly good" and "brilliant!" He was very lively and talked about the Cambridge history a bit with facts like: it is 800 years old this year, it is the cheapest university to go to in England, one of the most prestigious, and named several great philosophers and influential persons who attended there. Professor Moseley also spoke about the seminars and trips that Dixie State faculty were able to go on to Cambridge and how important it is to have ties between the schools.

Exposition vs. Description vs. Casue & Effect Modes

Expostition Writing

Exposition is explanatory writing
Exposition can be an incidental part of a description or a narration, or it can be the heart of an article
Aside from clarity, the key problem with exposition is credibility. What makes your explanation believable? Normally, writers solve this problem by citing authorities who have good credentials and good reason to be experts in the subject.
http://www.longleaf.net/ggrow/modes.html

Description Writing

Creates a main impression-an overall effect, feeling, or image -about the topic
Uses concrete, specific details to support the main impression
Uses details that appeal to the five senses: sight, hearing, smell, taste, and touch

http://ksdl.ksbe.edu/writingresource/description.html

Cause & Effect

In this kind of essay, the aim is to explain the causes (reasons) or the effects (results) of an event or situation.
e.g. Causes of air pollution (multiple factors leading to air pollution).
e.g. Effects of watching too much TV (many effects of a situation).

http://www.buowl.boun.edu.tr/students/types%20of%20essays/Cause%20and%20effect%20Essay.htm

At first I was just going to go with description. However, after looking into the different modes a little moreI feel my paper would best be written with cause and effect along with exposition. I need to explain in detail the problem and connect it to the media but I also want to show the effects of the problem.

Fifty Questions About Child Prostitution and Trafficking

1. What age groups are most effected?
2. What countries have the worst problem?
3. What are those countries doing to fix it and help the children?
4. Are boys or girls more effected?
5. Are there any agencies, organizations, or groups that are doing anything to stop trafficking?
6. What are some tactics traffickers use?
7. What is the history of prostitution?
8. What are the economics in the countries where this is happening and is there a correlation?
9. Where does the US rank?
10. What kinds of work do the kids do who are sold into slavery?
11. Do parents try to find their kids?
12. Do parents sell their kids?
13. What are the working conditions like for the kids?
14. What is the usual outcome for child slaves?
15. Do any of them escape?
16. How much money are the traffickers making?
17. What is the punishment for traffickers in the different countries?
18. Are police involved with the traffickers?
19. How organized is the trafficking?
20. Are there any known organized trafficking groups?
21. What are some psychological effects on the children?
22. What is the mortality rate of the children in these conditions?
23. Are there certain countries that traffickers pick up kids from and take then take them to a different one?
24. Where are the majority of trafficked children from that end up in the US?
25. What are parents doing to protect their children?
26. Where are the people usually from that buy trafficked children as slaves?
27. Where are the people usually from that buy children as prostitutes?
28. Are there any punishments for people from the US going abroad and purchasing children for sex?
29. Are children educated about safety in countries where this is a major crisis?
30. How many children does this happen to?
31. What are the conditions child slaves live under?
32. Does the US buy any of the products that they make?
33. Why are US citizens who are minors prosecuted for being prostitutes but not girls that are trafficked from other countries?
34. Are child slaves ever let go?
35. What do they do as adults ?
36. How many children die from sexual transmitted diseases?
37. What are some other leading causes of death among child prostitutes?
38. What are some health conditions that child slaves deal with?
39. How closely related is child pornography and child prostitution?
40. Are there any agencies that deal with rehabilitating the children that are rescued or run away?
41. Are parents punished for selling their kids in other countries?
42. How many kids are trafficked into the US for labor or sex?
43. How popular is the sex tourism?
44. Do children prostitutes get paid at all?
45. Do child prostitutes continue the cycle once they are adults?
46. What is the percentage of girls that get pregnant?
47. What do if a girl gets pregnant?
48. Are there other crimes associated with child trafficking?
49. Are the children ever forced to use drugs?
50. What can an individual do to help stop child trafficking ans prostitution?

Double Negatives

I don't think I have a problem with this, but I couldn't think of anything to do this on and my boyfriend mentioned double negatives. Actually, when hearing someone speak with double negatives it sounds very "country". "I don't want nothing," would be a great example of this. It should be "I want something". A website that gave many examples was this one.

Dangling Modifers

This is an error I usually do not catch, but realize it can be a major problem. This happens when the modifier is "attached" to something other than what the author intended. For instance being attached to an object instead of a person. Ex. "I saw the trailer peeking through the window" would need to be re-written as "I saw the trailer as I was peeking through the window"
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